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How about a little train haiku? I'll start with my first effort...

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espeefoamer
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Posted by espeefoamer on Friday, May 6, 2005 7:29 PM
QUOTE: Originally posted by nanaimo73

765 is perfection ,
Beauty , power , and speed .
Just look at her go !

That's not haiku !
That's 7-6-5 !
My God- Steam haiku ! Does anyone want to set up another thread for "steam haiku"?
Perhaps some 4-8-4 , 8-4-4 or 4-8-8-4 .
4-6-6-4 should be easy - but 3-9-8-5 would be a real Challenge(r).
Just a thought.

I will try to
put eight in second line here and
see some trains now[8D].
Ride Amtrak. Cats Rule, Dogs Drool.
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selector
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Posted by selector on Friday, May 6, 2005 5:16 PM
I beleive that it was the Romanian railroad that ran the 5-7-5. It was called the "Hork-u".
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Anonymous
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Posted by Anonymous on Friday, May 6, 2005 4:38 PM
Wabash Cannonball
Races through Hoosier cornfields
Next stop Lafayette
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Junctionfan
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Posted by Junctionfan on Friday, May 6, 2005 12:48 PM
Who said I was any good at this?[swg]
Andrew
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nanaimo73
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Posted by nanaimo73 on Friday, May 6, 2005 12:01 PM
765 is perfection ,
Beauty , power , and speed .
Just look at her go !

That's not haiku !
That's 7-6-5 !
My God- Steam haiku ! Does anyone want to set up another thread for "steam haiku"?
Perhaps some 4-8-4 , 8-4-4 or 4-8-8-4 .
4-6-6-4 should be easy - but 3-9-8-5 would be a real Challenge(r).
Just a thought.
Dale
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Jack_S
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Posted by Jack_S on Friday, May 6, 2005 11:11 AM
QUOTE: Originally posted by Junctionfan

Waiting at the station,
See the train coming,
Is it a freight train?
Amtrak's on-time wow!


that's 6, 5, 5, 5

Haiku is 5, 7, 5
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Hugh Jampton
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Posted by Hugh Jampton on Friday, May 6, 2005 8:51 AM
what the hell is this?
haiku does not even rhyme!
I like limmericks.
Generally a lurker by nature

Be Alert
The world needs more lerts.

It's the 3rd rail that makes the difference.
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Junctionfan
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Posted by Junctionfan on Friday, May 6, 2005 7:56 AM
Waiting at the station,
See the train coming,
Is it a freight train?
Amtrak's on-time wow!
Andrew
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Jack_S
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Posted by Jack_S on Thursday, May 5, 2005 11:56 PM
Detector so loud

says no defects to slow us.

Highball down the track!
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edblysard
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Posted by edblysard on Thursday, May 5, 2005 10:51 PM
Fog soft night sounds mute

Broken by steams white fury

Iron rails lead me home

23 17 46 11

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MP57313
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Posted by MP57313 on Thursday, May 5, 2005 10:48 PM
Chessie lives

CSX freight train
car lettered "Chessie System"
In Paw Paw, where else?
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Kozzie
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Posted by Kozzie on Thursday, May 5, 2005 6:58 PM
Here's one for Ed, working on the Houston Port Terminal Railroad (I did ask him if I could post this, and he said o.k.)

Ed's hands swift and sure
switching cars, riding the rails
trains leaving on time


Dave
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espeefoamer
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Posted by espeefoamer on Thursday, May 5, 2005 6:39 PM
Steam engine appears on horizon
Daylight is on time today
Red and orange cars follow[:)].
Ride Amtrak. Cats Rule, Dogs Drool.
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Anonymous
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Posted by Anonymous on Thursday, May 5, 2005 6:20 PM
This ones called "765"

Smoke in the distace.
Whistel blows in the distace.
765 thunders down the track.
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Kozzie
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Posted by Kozzie on Thursday, May 5, 2005 4:57 PM
Hey everyone! Thanks for giving it a go! [:)]
It's a challenge, but produces some good stuff! [:)][:)]

Hard to pick a favourite from these efforts, but I particularly like Richard's "Departure" and Dale's "Green Lights"

Keep 'em comin' people, let's get those litlle grey cells jumping! [:)]

Dave
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selector
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Posted by selector on Thursday, May 5, 2005 2:57 PM
Morning fog billows;
Air pumps drubbing in the mist.
Lazarus rises.
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dharmon
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Posted by dharmon on Thursday, May 5, 2005 2:25 PM
Dog bark, do he bite?
Run from cop with all my might.
No train ride tonight.
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MP57313
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Posted by MP57313 on Thursday, May 5, 2005 2:20 PM
Later in the year
Relatives travel to Oz
To ride the "new" Ghan!
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Anonymous
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Posted by Anonymous on Thursday, May 5, 2005 1:58 PM
QUOTE: Originally posted by adrianspeeder

Ummm, they don't rhyme...

Adrianspeeder


They are not supposed to, that is the beauty of haikus.

Denver and Rio Grande
The Main Line Through the Rockies
Forever in the Past
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adrianspeeder
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Posted by adrianspeeder on Thursday, May 5, 2005 1:45 PM
Ummm, they don't rhyme...

Adrianspeeder

USAF TSgt C-17 Aircraft Maintenance Flying Crew Chief & Flightline Avionics Craftsman

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tree68
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Posted by tree68 on Thursday, May 5, 2005 1:44 PM
Huge Locomotives
Many cars trailing behind
FRED brings up the rear.

LarryWhistling
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There's one thing about humility - the moment you think you've got it, you've lost it...

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lonewoof
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Posted by lonewoof on Thursday, May 5, 2005 1:15 PM
Black smoke on mountains
stack blast across the green valley
Ephraim's machines run at Cass!

Remember: In South Carolina, North is southeast of Due West... HIOAg /Bill

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dealemeout
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Posted by dealemeout on Thursday, May 5, 2005 11:53 AM
Crossing gates lower
Fool in fast car is rushing
Hard to mourn his kind
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Jack_S
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Posted by Jack_S on Thursday, May 5, 2005 11:14 AM
QUOTE: Originally posted by Nuclearwinter

Green light on the way
In notch 8 making up time
Sounds of drivers on the track



Try this:

Green light on the way
In notch 8 making up time
Driver sounds on tracks

Jack
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Anonymous
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Posted by Anonymous on Thursday, May 5, 2005 8:52 AM
QUOTE: Originally posted by Nuclearwinter

Green light on the way
In notch 8 making up time
Sounds of drivers on the track



Opps[:I]
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cpbloom
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Posted by cpbloom on Thursday, May 5, 2005 3:56 AM
Born on April first
In the northeast it did rule
CONRAIL, NO ONES FOOL!

[:o)][:p]
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rich747us
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Posted by rich747us on Thursday, May 5, 2005 2:41 AM
Waiting to depart,
The engineer calls HIGHBALL!
We speed through the night.
When there's a tie at the crossing.....YOU LOOSE! STOP, LOOK, LISTEN, AND LIVE! GOD BLESS CONRAIL!</font id="blue"> 1976-1999 (R.I.P.)
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nanaimo73
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Posted by nanaimo73 on Thursday, May 5, 2005 2:10 AM
Green lights all the way,
Sounds of drivers on the track,
Clean smoke up the stack !


Thanks nuclearwinter for doing most of the work. You have 5-7-7.

Dale
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Anonymous
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Posted by Anonymous on Wednesday, May 4, 2005 11:54 PM
Green light on the way
In notch 8 making up time
Sounds of drivers on the track
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