How about a little train haiku? I'll start with my first effort...

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How about a little train haiku? I'll start with my first effort...
Posted by Kozzie on Wednesday, May 04, 2005 7:26 PM
I know there are plenty of talented folk on this Forum who will be able to do a good job with this style of poetry from Japan. Haiku has only three lines. First line has five syllables, second line has seven, and the third has five. An art of brevity but still conveying a mental image.

So here's my effort...[:0]

diesel thunder growls
lonely horn sounds through the night
rain glistens on rails

Hopefuly some of you other folk will give it a go...

Cheers [:)] [;)]

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Posted by MP57313 on Wednesday, May 04, 2005 11:47 PM
Hey, the gates are down!
I cannot believe my eyes
The Sunset's on time!
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Posted by Kozzie on Wednesday, May 04, 2005 11:52 PM
Good one Mike! [:)][:)]

Keep 'em comin people.. [:)]

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Posted by Anonymous on Wednesday, May 04, 2005 11:54 PM
Green light on the way
In notch 8 making up time
Sounds of drivers on the track
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Posted by nanaimo73 on Thursday, May 05, 2005 2:10 AM
Green lights all the way,
Sounds of drivers on the track,
Clean smoke up the stack !


Thanks nuclearwinter for doing most of the work. You have 5-7-7.

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Posted by rich747us on Thursday, May 05, 2005 2:41 AM
Waiting to depart,
The engineer calls HIGHBALL!
We speed through the night.
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Posted by cpbloom on Thursday, May 05, 2005 3:56 AM
Born on April first
In the northeast it did rule
CONRAIL, NO ONES FOOL!

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Posted by Anonymous on Thursday, May 05, 2005 8:52 AM
QUOTE: Originally posted by Nuclearwinter

Green light on the way
In notch 8 making up time
Sounds of drivers on the track



Opps[:I]
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Posted by Jack_S on Thursday, May 05, 2005 11:14 AM
QUOTE: Originally posted by Nuclearwinter

Green light on the way
In notch 8 making up time
Sounds of drivers on the track



Try this:

Green light on the way
In notch 8 making up time
Driver sounds on tracks

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Posted by dealemeout on Thursday, May 05, 2005 11:53 AM
Crossing gates lower
Fool in fast car is rushing
Hard to mourn his kind
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Posted by lonewoof on Thursday, May 05, 2005 1:15 PM
Black smoke on mountains
stack blast across the green valley
Ephraim's machines run at Cass!

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Posted by tree68 on Thursday, May 05, 2005 1:44 PM
Huge Locomotives
Many cars trailing behind
FRED brings up the rear.

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Posted by adrianspeeder on Thursday, May 05, 2005 1:45 PM
Ummm, they don't rhyme...

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Posted by Anonymous on Thursday, May 05, 2005 1:58 PM
QUOTE: Originally posted by adrianspeeder

Ummm, they don't rhyme...

Adrianspeeder


They are not supposed to, that is the beauty of haikus.

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Posted by MP57313 on Thursday, May 05, 2005 2:20 PM
Later in the year
Relatives travel to Oz
To ride the "new" Ghan!
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Posted by dharmon on Thursday, May 05, 2005 2:25 PM
Dog bark, do he bite?
Run from cop with all my might.
No train ride tonight.
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Posted by selector on Thursday, May 05, 2005 2:57 PM
Morning fog billows;
Air pumps drubbing in the mist.
Lazarus rises.
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Posted by Kozzie on Thursday, May 05, 2005 4:57 PM
Hey everyone! Thanks for giving it a go! [:)]
It's a challenge, but produces some good stuff! [:)][:)]

Hard to pick a favourite from these efforts, but I particularly like Richard's "Departure" and Dale's "Green Lights"

Keep 'em comin' people, let's get those litlle grey cells jumping! [:)]

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Posted by Anonymous on Thursday, May 05, 2005 6:20 PM
This ones called "765"

Smoke in the distace.
Whistel blows in the distace.
765 thunders down the track.
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Posted by espeefoamer on Thursday, May 05, 2005 6:39 PM
Steam engine appears on horizon
Daylight is on time today
Red and orange cars follow[:)].
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Posted by Kozzie on Thursday, May 05, 2005 6:58 PM
Here's one for Ed, working on the Houston Port Terminal Railroad (I did ask him if I could post this, and he said o.k.)

Ed's hands swift and sure
switching cars, riding the rails
trains leaving on time


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Posted by MP57313 on Thursday, May 05, 2005 10:48 PM
Chessie lives

CSX freight train
car lettered "Chessie System"
In Paw Paw, where else?
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Posted by edblysard on Thursday, May 05, 2005 10:51 PM
Fog soft night sounds mute

Broken by steams white fury

Iron rails lead me home

23 17 46 11

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Posted by Jack_S on Thursday, May 05, 2005 11:56 PM
Detector so loud

says no defects to slow us.

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Posted by Junctionfan on Friday, May 06, 2005 7:56 AM
Waiting at the station,
See the train coming,
Is it a freight train?
Amtrak's on-time wow!
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Posted by Hugh Jampton on Friday, May 06, 2005 8:51 AM
what the hell is this?
haiku does not even rhyme!
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Posted by Jack_S on Friday, May 06, 2005 11:11 AM
QUOTE: Originally posted by Junctionfan

Waiting at the station,
See the train coming,
Is it a freight train?
Amtrak's on-time wow!


that's 6, 5, 5, 5

Haiku is 5, 7, 5
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Posted by nanaimo73 on Friday, May 06, 2005 12:01 PM
765 is perfection ,
Beauty , power , and speed .
Just look at her go !

That's not haiku !
That's 7-6-5 !
My God- Steam haiku ! Does anyone want to set up another thread for "steam haiku"?
Perhaps some 4-8-4 , 8-4-4 or 4-8-8-4 .
4-6-6-4 should be easy - but 3-9-8-5 would be a real Challenge(r).
Just a thought.
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Posted by Junctionfan on Friday, May 06, 2005 12:48 PM
Who said I was any good at this?[swg]
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Posted by Anonymous on Friday, May 06, 2005 4:38 PM
Wabash Cannonball
Races through Hoosier cornfields
Next stop Lafayette

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